The outside world didn't know about these children. It was better that way, Enirgon's employees were told, as they had to sign contract that forced them to keep their mouth tightly shut about the horrible experiments that happened there. These were no children. Although they looked like humans, and their appearance seemed just as cute as those of regular kids, there was something odd about them. Their eyes were empty.
Until then, there never were real problems. Sure, there were occasions in which a kid accidently escaped and wandered through the buildings. But they never did any damage.
How drastically would everything change, just by the appearance of one boy. Experiment XIV, or fourteen, as he was called. He looked just like the others when he arrived, just like a normal kid. With his black hair and pale skin, he kind of looked like a kid from Darkai, they said jokingly. Only his bright, glowing, red eyes set him apart from the rest of the group. The empty eyes of a true demon, they learned very soon...
Made with Paint tool SAI & Photoshop in way too many hours. But at least it's better than the 2007 version: damaimikaz.deviantart.com/art/…
Emion © Damai Mikaz
I would probably start focusing on detail, make sure that the clothes have the right amount of information. I would look at drapery, the shoulders are points while the mid area hangs, so there will be more of a fold there.
I'm a little picky, and would say that I would have straightened up that bottom edge.
As for the story, there isn't much in his expression to explain whats going on, there is no intimidation or anger or anything really. So I would make sure it is saying what you feel it is.
The man in the foreground, his arm kind of melts into his body with no dividing line or way to tell them apart. That's the main thing that's bugging me, which means this is a really good picture.
I believe the folds of the clothes could be a bit more "dynamic" if you know what I mean. There could probably me a few more too. Looking at my shirt now, I either have a very wrinkled shirt, or he has a stiffly ironed one.
The hair too, I think could have more of a sheen. Feel free to disregard that though, it may be the result of watching lots of anime.
Last, a question: what is that bar at the bottom of the picture supposed to be? Right now, I'm imagining it as some sort of rail, but it'd be nice to know what it is.
beautifully depicts the conflict of good and evil, light & dark. Innocence(with a little twist) and corruption very nice
I also have a story to each drawing I make. It sounds like a good idea to write a part it is related to in the description. Much better than boring explaining. I think I will get inspired by the way you do it (well, if you don't mind it. I'll do my own stories and pictures of course XD don't worry)
Fingers crossed in your next work ^^